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PostSubject: Alice Alexander Vesanus   Wed Nov 05, 2014 12:26 am

General Information
Name: Alice Alexander Vesanus
Age: 18
Birth Season: Winter
Gender: Female
Personality: Alice has a Passive attitude having no interest in picking sides in any matter be it War,Fights or any situation that would divide a group or mass of people in a moral choice. Given her Sharp mind and Training she would prefer to sit on the fence till she is aware of something of interest within a group or a person to truly act. A little violent but keeping to her ways of observing she can be kind but also very cruel or malevolent to one if she decides they have done something she likes or Dislikes. Calm,Precise and cunning Alice can be your Dream or your Nightmare.

When speaking to people she is very passive and gives no hint she is an assassin at all but will not reveal anything of her father even to people whom ask her about her family she will simply respond “My Family died long ago...~ given her training and skills she is less likely to attack but will get very short tempered with any constant poking at the subject resulting in her simply walking away or just trying to change the subject depending on how annoyed she is. She dislikes anything that is sexual even though her father did inform her of that sort of thing like any decent parent would. She prefers romance being reminded of how Cyan and her Mother meet over simple questions that would lead to out right sex.
Hunter Type: Mark Hunter~Bounty Hunter~ ~In effect when she becomes a hunter~
Height: “5.8”
Weight: 140 lbs
Appearance: Alice Alexander Vesanus is “5.8” tall and weighs in at 140 lbs. Having the body type of an Hour Glass with rather graceful and beautiful features. Having large breasts and a nice rump both fitting quite well with her body. She has long legs and great curves which make her look good at any angle along with a face that has traits of German and Asian with Scarlet eyes that seem to dimly glow in light and in the dark. Alice has long platinum hair that drapes down to the mid section of her back and is healthy and thick on all sides of her head. The front having a cute curl that keeps her hair from getting in her face. Having pale white skin it almost shines and glows in light and in the dark.  
General Clothing: Alice normally wears a skirt made from white material with a black trim the skirt reaching down just above her knees. Along with this she wears white stockings that she wears over her legs up to her upper thighs. Wearing a shirt that is made with the same white material as her skirt that tightly fits over her torso her breasts not helping to pop out. The sleeves long but she keeps them rolled up to her elbow. Her shirt has buttons going from the mid chest up that are colored black.
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Background: Alice Alexander Vesanus was born into the arms of Master Assassin Cyan Alexander husband of the passed Sophia Alexander Vesanus. Trained all her life in the arts of the Shadow learned to fight,defend and come up with many tactical solutions to problems that could arise in her life. Such as the art of pick pocketing and picking locks up to learning each and every pressure point within the human body. By the age of 15 she was able to take down Cyan himself in a sparing match but only won cause he was sick and less effective learning before the age of 5 the ability to adapt quickly using a technique that allowed the brain of a baby to soak in more information with careful skill of the user. By the age of 18 now fully trained by Cyan she has surpassed him in skill but did not have the experience he did. While her skills where past his own she had not gained the understand he had or any lessons from life and it's message.

Cyan had deemed her ready to travel the world with him and explore places like he had in his youth. But even at the age of 77 he was in shape but he was no longer young still able to fight off a bear but not as  durable as he had been. He was soon to die as is from a sickness brought on from age but he was proud of his Daughter Alice teaching her everything he knew. Even the odd art of being able to resist poisons and other lethal chemicals that would dare say kill a normal human. Alice was still wanting to learn still seeking information of the world so she left her home having the permission from her Father Cyan. Her Skill set was well off but she still has much to learn and much to Discover.



~Training~
Working out:
Cyan taught her how to keep her self in shape from a young age by doing push ups or even by using the imagination to come up with a way to keep the body under stress to burn any bad fat the body has. from simple jogging to a complected set up with a branch and Alice having to push her self up enough to grasp the next branch in an instant to keep getting higher or lower many times.

Combat:
Alice was shown how to fight by practicing a multitude of martial arts which to draw on. while she did not show interest in a single martial art rather took from each one she learned to form her own rogue style. She kept up with it by using training dummy's and other tools that allowed the user to hit it with force and speed. On the other note her endurance and speed was raised by running in the woods outside of her home and going back to working out and keeping her body up to date and refined for any situation she may face.

Senses:
She learned to refine her metal sense by mediating and focusing on many tasks. Such as waiting for the moment an object would sway slightly to hit it or catch flies out of the air with her bare hands by simply focusing on the moment. Her reflexes also grew due to training that put her in a blind fold having to avoid objects from sound and vibration. Focusing deeply to keep a state of mind to pick enhance her other senses such as hearing or feeling something. Even being able to spot things easier. Note  any sense that is higher can be effected such as sight with Bright light and loud noises with higher hearing.

Poison Resistance
Alice has experience due to Cyan's paranoid idea that poison is a silent killer and can strike from anywhere. taking small sips from many poisons building up a slow and painful residence to poisons that would normally kill someone. She isn't fully immune to all poisons but her body can resists the effects of most poison to not kill her on the spot. The fact that she works out so much also helps her body fight poison and it's effects.  

General Fighting Style Hand to Hand,Twin Daggers,Counter Offensive,Defensive Situation depending on the enemy and the environment. Can adapt quickly and find weak points
Fighting Style: Alice prefers to save the offensive style after she has learned about the enemy from seeing how they attack and move. Using counters to reduce damage from heavy attacks or just avoiding them out right of a large amount of force is being used. Very observational and clever she will expose a weak point if she can or just run if it is too much to handle.
Strengths:
Intelligent
~Strong observation skills combined with the skills gained with Cyan's training of ga of Cyan's training having highly advanced skills in adapting to situations and tactics of the enemy. This was grown by simply teaching Alice to do mundane tasks such as watch Cyan train and pick out flaws or watch how people interact~

Physically Fit
~Works out and knows how to take care of her self due to the training given by cyan when it camethering information by tracking,sneaking and ease dropping on people to gain knowledge~
~Result to food and how to prepare it. even going as far as learning how to keep in shape with daily exercise keeping away from illness with diet and knowing what is and isn't deadly when it comes to poisons and how to get rid of them within her body.~

Speed:
~Speed is above average~

Weaknesses:

Weak Durability&Strength
~All though she is fit and healthy her body frame making her durability suffer and is less them average for someone of her Durability.Her punches are weak and are less them average.

Stamina
~Tires easily due to the training strain on her body over the years depending on how intense the fight is will determine how long she can fight~






Nen Info

Nen Type: 100% Transmute 60% Enhancer
Nen Abilities:
Name: Ignition Force ~Unable to use this until Alice is able to use Nen~
Nen Type: Transmuter
Category: Elemental-Molten Earth
Description:Using the two elements Earth and Fire the user is able to change the property of their Nen to mimic Molten Earth using it to either effect her own attacks to imprint a burning wound that is slow or a high explosive burst that deals instant damage. While it is a mimic of Lava it is not as potent as real lava otherwise it would burn the user but it's temperature is about the same as White hot flame enough to give 3rd degree burns impact unless the target blocks the attack with an object or the burning burning effect is delt with with water or heat resistant surfaces or nen types. If an attack misses depending on the power used in the attack it will create an aoe effect if striking a solid surfaces making an aoe effect or rather be focused enough to be more powerful and accurate.

Strengths:
-Super Heated attacks
-long lasting wounds that either burst or do long term damage
-Fire%Earth users can't absorb it unless they have control over Fire and Earth
-Area of effect attributes or Direct accuracy
-External heat attacks leaving the user with little heat damage
Can be used with a handle that is heat resistant with an empty blade slot to create a blade or nen
made with Molten Earth Nen.


Weakness:
-Water or Heat resistant materials such as damp wood or stone
-Can't use with weapons with wood or metal based handles
-The heat from attacks if to large will cause quicker exhaustion of the user and will quicken the rate of Dehydration

Neutral:
-Metal surfaces may deflect the heat back into the users hand if bare but can overheat the shield or weapon it hits.
-Earth Nen will create a stall mate and negate the heat attribute. But if any flame goes around the enemy on the other side could still be burned
-Ice Nen will cancel out creating steam either aiding the user or the enemy
-Both the user and the enemy are at risk of getting burned if the attack is not used right or if it is used right
-While the user would be more resistant to ice based nen attacks it could also be a weakness incased and the nen of the user burns more then it has to.

Role Play Information
Role Play Sample:Alice heard the door creek open a little seeing a rather goth inspired women seeing as this was her bunk mate she lifted her head for a moment smiling a little only to see how bare her room was. The bed was the only thing in sight covered while she did enjoy the color white she did not enjoy a wall with nothing on it. Carefully taking out paintings that were all about “3ft” tall and wide having different things painted on them trying to brain storm where to put everything. While she thought she went back to her bags plucking out little figures made from glass and clay a few made from metal. Some cute others more Horror inspired placing them on empty shelves beside each other. Getting to placing each painting on the walls filling them in even lines on the wall. But one of them was huge being “8ft” wide and tall placing it beside her bed. It's detail was so nice that it looked like a work of the Gods. Having the image of an Old man with long raven black hair and a black mask only showing a deep Yellow Glow. Wearing a simple business suit but was white. The arms were shown in front with the hands holding the other with his body in a front leaning arch pose. The background was black with the eerie addition of the pale moon and a few disturbing masses of souls with the expression of bliss.

After she put it up she had to place a chair below her to reach up and hang this piece but instead she fell off her chair making a loud thump as she landed face first in her bed the chair being toppled over. With a painful landing she groaned in pain staying still for a bit only rolling on her back she cried out in pain. -Owwwww! Stupid gravity!..at least I hung up the painting..but my leg still hurts..haha!..really gravity you betray me..- Alice smiled a little sounding to what people would call her Insane. But she didn't care for it or the insults she was given but she was interested in her roommate
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PostSubject: Re: Alice Alexander Vesanus   Wed Nov 05, 2014 4:18 pm

Alright, I'll be the first to check this app. Also I won't be focusing on grammar and spell check (though I see you haven't either so don’t knock on mine) if you decide the description is just fine for your character and all then there isn't much a point in face claiming the image.

General Information
Well first off I see that you made a face claim, in order to put use to it post it above or under your “Appearance” description, I’ll even make the code for ya Very Happy
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History
your gonna have to be more detailed in how she took down such an assassin master at the age of 15, if its direct combat, then you are insinuating that your character is at the level of a master at the age of 15, which is a no go. Even Killua, a 14 year old assassin child who would be considered OP due to his growth rate on the forum isn't even at that level despite being born into an intense assassination family. And when calling him a “Master” I am to assume that he is in the strength range of Killua's father.

Also if you have access to all these “secret techniques” that allow you to do abnormal and superhuman skills, I’d like to see a complete write up of the moves that she knows (Or at least the superhuman and lethal ones) if not then your RP will be very limited otherwise, you won't be able to just make up techniques that pass superhuman abilities on a whim. These skills I would find comparable to killua's claws, or shadow step used in the first arc, nothing to out there. What you have currently is fine to an extent, I don't mind the increased learning capacity of a baby's brain or poison resistance, however that one I will get more into lower down the line.

Training
I think you are time skipping a bit to much for some of these abilities, even with the learning capacity, you are telling me that from about the age of 3-4(being generous at when a baby should start being trained) up to 14years later, she became a blind kung fu master and creator who trained her body immunities, put her senses to an inhuman height, take down an assassin master, keep up with harsh workout regiments. Ect. Your master is 77, which would be around a believable age for an assassin to become a master, generous even since he was a master before you were born i'm assuming (so around 50 or so) and you became just as good as him in a fraction of his years. (about a quarter of his life give or take)

Also both poison resistance and Senses are considered a strength, even if you don't have it in those categories I will be including them in such.

general fighting style
I would like more detail in fighting style, what forms of attack does she use, as it stands right now she is too.. Perfect, despite you stating she lacks experiences, you have her written as if she has all the experience.

Manipulative isn't a strength or ability, that is just a personality perk.

Quick senses~ please go into more detail about how it works, now just ~Result of training~

with strengths in general I want to hear more about her physical attributes, take some other applications as example. Physique (physical strength), Speed, Endurance, Stamina, ect.

Curiosity is completely a personality Quirk it is neither good or bad, weakness or strength. It helps you gain information and helps with other aspects which allows it to have strength, however it as well has its own drawbacks making it a balanced trait on its own and doesn't balance the mass amount of strengths you have.
Intense focus, again has its own perks and drawbacks that back it up completely, however it contradicts your whole adaptability forte, as if you are so focus on an enemy that you can't handle another, it would mean that you aren't able to adapt to the surrounding environment as well since you are so focus, if you agree to those terms I will allow it as a weakness since its deficits outweigh its benefits. How ever it still isn’t enough to balance.

Nen Info
you don’t need to add the percentages since they are fixed throughout anyone with Nen. Just tack Conjuration on there and that is all set, or you can put the whole chart down for your own convenience.
100%~Conjuration
80%~Transmutation
60%~Enhancement, Manipulation
40%~ Emission
1%~ Specialist(No mechanic is added for this 1% as of yet, so please do not ask how to add two zeros to that 1%, or I’ll just do this '001%')

Final Evaluation
As it stands, your character is just to...Perfect. She has very quick learning capacity which I'mi sure is why you think she can learn all that she has in such a quick time. I don’t mind you using that as to why she is adaptive, but otherwise it will be considered Overpowered as you are using it to that extent, if you wish to use that technique as an excuse then I will have to deem it as such. Poison resistance I am fine with and even the techniques you have (or im ok with you having the concept, I need to see them before I can judge them) your character is well written for the most part but the General Fighting style seems to be lacking. The character though in terms of background does fit the Hunter x Hunter universe (no historical earth events or other anime events from random shows) however all I have is the issues I addressed. The ~Training~ is a nice touch, a7nd im a sucker for '~' if you haven't noticed. However I do hope that you know that your characters physical and mental attributes will be akin to your tier (as in if you get a 0-2, fighting Keten's 14year old Adrian, you would have just as much a chance to win then lose really) Orange is bound by the same limitations with his Kronsire, despite being a war veteran 27 year old armored soldier, my 14year old has the same chance of beating him as being beaten by him really due to them both being 0-3.

Due to the detail and not taking into account the issues I will grant your character with a tier of 0-2. and 0 (out of two) Hidden potential points, however depending on your cooperation with making this character balanced and fair in the NxH forum (note:Cooperation does not mean submission) that 0 could change into a 2 even. However the tier will most likely not change.

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PostSubject: Re: Alice Alexander Vesanus   Wed Nov 05, 2014 7:16 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Alice Alexander Vesanus   Wed Nov 05, 2014 7:50 pm

Approved as of last edit, 11-5-14
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PostSubject: Re: Alice Alexander Vesanus   Wed Nov 19, 2014 7:37 pm

Here are the change I want to see for the Nen powers
1. A range of usefulness before she can no longer control the power
2. post cool downs for more powerful moves so you cannot spam ranged attacks constantly that exploded
3. Make the 3rd degree burns only usable for more powerful attacks with cooldowns
4. More elaboration on what Alice can do with the nen, can she only shoot it off, can it bee manipulated? can it be turned into something like a pillar? What is the range until she cannot control material

These are the first things I see, just looking it over, be sure to look over the character and ability rules and guidelines if you are confused on anything I've said.

Also what would happen if she was faced with a water user or any of her weaknesses? (In general for clarification)

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